Friday, January 4, 2013

Me & the Breeze...

Me and the breeze came to blows last night, 

When I noticed him creeping through the mid-day light. 

I saw him shimmy along the wall,

Take a fall and commence the crawl. 

He took a handful of leaves as he started steppin, 

Each foot print neglecting his misdirection. 

But I wasn't fooled by his tom foolery, 

I said that breeze won't make a fool out of me. 

So I rounded the corner and caught him like a cold, 

He was bold but to old to make me unfold. 

So i choked him out and he died in that place, 

Because he moved the hair that sat perfectly in your face.

6 comments:

  1. Beautiful!!! This was very vivid!

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  2. The ending line was quite a surprise ~

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  3. Very nicely expressed! So glad to meet you at Poets United Poetry Pantry. Don't forget to stop by Wonder Wednesday here where we have a Wednesday prompt....and hope to see you return next Sunday again for our Open Pantry! (Our Pantry opens at 1 a.m. Sunday - Central time. If you come earlier, you will see more interaction usually...)

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  4. Awesome internal rhyming. The ending was killer. And clever.

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  5. Thanks guys. I really appreciate the kind words especially from other writers.

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  6. wow, poor breeze! :D

    enjoyed the read.

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